User:Nicolemicha/Pathological demand avoidance/Kmcmiche Peer Review

General info
Nicolemicha
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Nicolemicha/Pathological demand avoidance
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Pathological demand avoidance

Evaluate the drafted changes
The contribution has not been added to the original article. There is a significant amount added to a new subheading termed "Identifying PDA." The third reference (PDAadmin. "What is demand avoidance?". PDA Society. Retrieved 2024-02-01.) is not a secondary literature source. Thus, it would be beneficial to find a peer reviewed article for this information. Citations added after almost every sentence in the new subheading would be beneficial as well. I believe the sentence "This does not mean they are less intense, instead this means one's reactions are hidden from people well." could be restructured as the following: "Internalized PDA reactions are not less intense; rather, their reactions are hidden from public view." The content added is relevant to the topic, and it reads neutrally. There is a repeated reference (PDAadmin. "What is demand avoidance?". PDA Society. Retrieved 2024-02-01.). It appears that all of the added citations are not peer reviewed, so the addition of better sources is needed. Overall, it is a great start, and the addition of reliable sources is the most needed adjustment.