User:Nicolerewis/The Half-Breed (short story)/Snshipp1 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Nicolerewis et al. "The Half Breed"
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Nicolerewis/The Half-Breed (short story)

Lead evaluation
The Lead reads more as a plot summary than an overview of the contents to be presented throughout the Wiki page. Maybe changing this section to your plot summary and working on a lead section would help out. Also the language needs to be a little more direct/ concise

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
The content is relevant to its topic. I'm glad your group added the background information, its necessary and good to know the history/events this text is taking place in/around.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
The tone needs to be a bit more neutral and formal. Adding "this story is an interesting tale" or "We learn little about him and his brother" will need to be tweaked and be direct ("This tale" or "Little information is given about Arrow-tip and his brother"). In the "Plot", the summary its self just needs some cleanup. The information is good, just some language issues here and there...just make sure you're telling the information as is without any bias or hints about your personal thoughts on the matter.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
The sources work and are relevant. Also, though I'm no expert about how to cite info on here and we're probably both used to MLA formatting, I think quotations and citing information works a bit differently on here. Instead of the actually quoting from your sources, I've noticed that other Wiki's directly rewrite and paraphrase claims from their sources then add the reference to the end of that claim.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
The content is well organized. As I've already mentioned, content needs to be cleaned up a bit and more concise. The spelling is fine, though there are few grammatical errors. Also make sure to capitalize Boddo's name.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
N/A

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

New Article Evaluation
Once the article is done, I'm sure there will be more sources to back the information given. Don't forget to link to other articles to make yours more discoverable.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
The content is good so far. Can't wait to see how everything looks in the end, good luck to y'all!