User:Nicoleschully/Polycystic ovary syndrome/Charlottebaker1 Peer Review

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Nicoleschully
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Evaluate
Overall, the information provided in the edits provide a lot to this article? All sources references meet the wikipedia guidelines and reliably support the claim that PCOS bears unique psychological consequences. My main suggestion would be to change some of the language used in describing these findings. The final paragraph, for example, begins by saying that “Many will suggest lifestyle changes…” Using many as the subject of the sentence felt a little vague — who are these many (doctors, family members, the general public)? What authority do they have to say such things? There were some other phrases you used (like “far more likely in the first sentence”) that also felt a little vague but not problematically so. I think with a little polishing of the language though your edits are in very good shape to be implemented onto the page! :)