User:Nikkigb/Effects of meditation/Dmwhite98 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Nikkigb


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nikkigb/Effects_of_meditation?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Effects of meditation

Evaluate the drafted changes
Looking at the original article not a lot of it up for tweaking. further down the paper when you get to the brain activity section, I would consider reword some of those sections. A lot of the information is very technical and while that is good, it might be beneficial to rework it or further explain some of the terminology so that is more understanding to various people across multiple populations. At the end of the paper, in the section labeled pain, more elaboration on that topic would help also. If adding more information to this section is something that is wanting to be done, then I might consider taking it out because it does not hold a whole lot of information. What information given could be added into a different section so that information is not just thrown out.