User:Nilenonsense/Khnum/Hazelsvest Peer Review

General info
Nilenonsense
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Nilenonsense/Khnum
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Khnum

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The additions you made to the lead look great. It feels a lot more complete, informative and fleshed out now. It was a good decision to add a paragraph explaining why he is depicted with the ram's head.

Content: I think it's great that you added a new section on his name, and the content and references look good. The only think I would say is that I found the last sentence a bit difficult to digest. Maybe try rewording it?

The worship section looks good as well. I think the rename was a good call. One thing is that it restates that he is the guardian of the source of the Nile, which was already mentioned in the lead, so it might be a bit repetitive to say it again.

I agree that adding some images to the Iconography section would be a good idea.

The rest of the sections also look really good and well-organized. It looks like you have a good game plan for going forward!