User:Ninapetersenn/Massachusetts smallpox epidemic/AGR379 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

IllyFerg, JacobWiki44, Katebryan, Ninapetersenn


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ninapetersenn/Massachusetts_smallpox_epidemic?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Massachusetts smallpox epidemic

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Lead- The lead in the main article is not very thorough and can use additional background information. Currently, your draft adds to the different sections but not to the lead.
 * Content- Some of the sections that you propose would serve better as background in the Lead, or as it's own background section. The information provided in "Effects of Indigenous People" and "How Massachusetts Handled the Outbreak" is very relevant to the topic at hand, and a good choice for the article.
 * Tone and Balance- The tone of what is written so far sounds like it has come directly from a Wikipedia article.
 * Sources- All of the sources come from respectable peer reviewed journals, so I don't believe there is anything inherrently wrong with any of them.
 * Organization- As I stated before, some of the sections that you are suggesting could serve better in the Lead, but the rest of the article works.
 * Media- No media present.
 * Overall impressions- There are some interesting and thoughtful ideas here, and a lot of good sources to back them up. Just try to work on the organization.