User:Ninastuder/Cafe Metropole/JessaMurray Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Nina Studer


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ninastuder/Cafe_Metropole?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * When you read the plot description, can you follow the story of the movie? Note any parts that were confusing to you.
 * - The plot description, for the most part, is clear and easy to follow. The second sentence in the fourth paragraph is a bit unclear, "He tries to discourage her love for him, without revealing the sordid details, without much luck". This sentence would work better if "without" was only used once. I would reword the sentence: He tries and fails to discourage her love for him without revealing all the sordid details. Are there internal wiki links to all relevant actors, production personnel, historical entities or events?
 * - Yes! Only thing I noticed was that the link to francs wasn't used for the first mentioning of francs. Are there citations for any facts that do NOT come from watching the movie itself?
 * - Yes! Do you see any grammatical issues that the writer should correct? - In the fourth paragraph, I would recommend splitting the fifth sentence into two sentences rather than one. Also, the last paragraph switches from present tense to past tense. I would go in and make it all present for consistency.  Any other comments on the entry?
 * - Really good!

Evaluate the drafted changes
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