User:Niortega/Jerry Pinkney/NamakaOK Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) Niortega
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Niortega/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? The lead gives a bit more attention to Pickney's numerous awards than to other sections in the article.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? Most detailed for awards, but all facts are concise and clear.

Lead evaluation
'''The lead makes clear who Pickney is and what he does. Perhaps add that he is African American? I do think the lead is a bit too detailed about his numerous awards. Some specific suggestions for balance:'''


 * You could use your sentence from the awards section—"Pinkney has received many awards and recognition for his work over the years."—and select the most significant of these to include in the lead. I realize neutrality could be difficult here, so maybe prioritize the most well-known awards?
 * You could also consider adding an overview of what you've found for the main article: Right now the lead indicates that Pickney illustrated children's books, but the updated outline shows novels and plays. You might also include a couple of his most well-known illustrations (e.g. Roll of Thunder, Hear My Cry).
 * I think Pickney's illustrations of postage stamps is significant enough to include in the lead. I don't know how many illustrators get this chance, but it seems a great honor, and the stamps' subjects are particularly important to the content of our course.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes, fantastic work checking sources and updating Pickney's bibliography so thoroughly!
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? No

Content evaluation
'''You have definitely improved the content itself, as well as attended to repetitive information. I appreciate the additional information about who cartoonist John Liney was and how he met Pickney. The expanded bibliography section is phenomenal and gives the reader a clear idea of how prolific Pickney has been. If you are able to verify the quotes, I suggest adding one (I vote the second) to the infobox.'''

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Tone and balance evaluation
'''Clear effort to update and add to the article using a neutral tone. No viewpoints over- or underrepresented, nor any attempts made to convince the reader of one perspective or judgment.'''

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work? I found 2 that don't work: Pickney's official website and the About.com video profile.

Sources and references evaluation
'''Phenomenal effort to evaluate sources and references! You have vastly improved the article by attending to unattributed sources, close wording, and updated citations.'''

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? None
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes

Organization evaluation
'''Nice rearrangement of structure, which improves the readability and flow of the article. Perhaps consider adding Exhibitions as a subsection of Awards & Recognition; my initial assumption was that Pickney had designed exhibitions, not that the exhibitions were of his own work.'''

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media -- N/A


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
If there any Pickney illustrations or images of his postage stamps that are allowed on Wikipedia, it would be a nice addition to give the reader a sense of his work.

For New Articles Only -- N/A
''' If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above. '''


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes
 * What are the strengths of the content added? Expanded bibliography, attentiveness to sources and close wording, more detail in the biography
 * How can the content added be improved? Specific suggestions noted elsewhere

Overall evaluation

 * I am truly impressed by your evaluation of (and resulting changes to) sources, notability, and close wording. You have done an incredible job updating Pickney's bibliography; your changes make clear his contribution to children's literature.
 * If you can find allowable images, it would be great to see examples of Pickney's work. I would also like to see more focus on Pickney as an African American doing this work. I know it can be difficult to stay neutral, but I think it's worth highlighting a bit more. If you can verify his second quote (about inspiring African American graphic artists), that would be a great place to start.
 * I learned a lot from your work, not just about Pickney, but about ways I could improve my own article. I had forgotten about the option of adding an "external links" section, which will be very helpful for my subject. Your overhaul of the Pickney article also inspires me to take a broader approach to mine. Thanks for sharing your inspiring and informative work!