User:Nioumad/Brendan/Zionnalof Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Nioumad


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Nioumad/Brendan


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Brendan

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead section has been edited for clarity and conciseness.The introductory sentence is well written, reading much clearer now and touches on some of the major sections of the article. Grammatically, the article could be rewritten for clarity. I also believe there are citations missing and not every claim is accounted for with evidence to prove or disprove. However, there are multiple sources that reflect the research and available literature of the topic. The lead sentence is thorough, but could possibly be split for conciseness and flow. The article is well-developed with multiple sections of information and includes images that enhance the overall understanding of the topic.