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= Article Evaluation = Abortion in the United States by state

-Is everything in the article relevant? Did anything distract you?

Most of the information in the article was relevant because it went over the history of abortion in the United States and included the reasons behind how states have some say in the law and how the states are different. The only thing that was semi distracting was the article talked about how other countries view abortion and the laws that they have. The name of the article was abortion in the United States so they could have left out the information on other countries.

-Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?

No the article includes the history of abortion and includes the most important laws that were put in place over time. It also includes a list of all the states and how they view abortion.

-What else could be improved?

There are eight states that go more in depth on how they view abortion in their state and the article could be improved if it included more descriptions on how other states felt.

-Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

Yes the article is neutral because it only includes the history of abortion in the United States. There are no parts that describe that abortions are right or wrong so there is not a particular position represented in the article. No viewpoints are overrepresented or underrepresented because there are not any viewpoints present.

-Do the links for citations work? Does the source support the claims in the article?

Yes the links for the citations work and the sources go more in depth on the claims that are made in the articles such as how the states view abortion and how many clinics are available to women.

-Is each fact referenced with a reliable reference? Where is the information coming from and are the sources neutral or biased?

Yes for example, Roe v. Wade is referenced with a reliable source that is not biased because it states the facts of the case. The information is coming from other wiki pages or websites that are used as resources and most of them are neutral.

-What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent the topic?

There is only one conversation on the talk page which is about the NARAL rating with two people agreeing with comment underneath with reasons.

-How is the article rated? Is it part of an WikiProjects?

It is part of the WikiProjects: Law, Feminism, and United States. It does not state a rating for the article.

-How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

We only briefly talked about abortion in class and how it is a big issue that feminists were fighting for. This article goes more in depth and describes how all of the states view abortion and not just an overall view.

Separatist Feminism
Is the article's content relevant to the topic? Are some areas under or over developed?

- Everything in the article is relevant to the pertaining topic but one area about the literature that happened because of the movement is a little under developed compared to the amount of information that is in the separatist movement in the United States.

Is it written neutrally?

-Yes it is not arguing that separatist feminism is the correct form of feminism but they could include more information about the bad sides of this form of feminism.

Does each claim have a citation? Are the citations reliable?

-Each claim has a citation included and all are reliable sources.

I think including information about why some women believe living separate from men is the correct from of feminism. This context will allow readers to understand separatist feminism more. Macdonald, J. (2016, August 29). Maybe what feminism needs is separatism, not inclusion. Retrieved from https://www.feministcurrent.com/2015/11/30/18995/

https://www.feministcurrent.com/2015/11/30/18995/

Add to an Article
In Separatist Feminism it gives examples of films that depict separate women from men. In this section they could include examples from the documentary "She's Beautiful When She's Angry" to show how women started to believe that they should be separate to man. The documentary shows how women started to enjoy each other's company and talks about the Furies, who were a separatist group.

First Draft
Adding to the reception section:

There were two sides to the lesbian feminist movement; one thought that lesbian life was chosen for feminism and the other for their own desire. Many believed that separatist feminism was seeking to eliminate men from culture and furthermore, eliminate butch from lesbian culture. Separating completely from men is very difficult because they are an important part of or society and the parts that they play. Some believe that men are parasitic towards women and that we must completely separate from them. Others still interact with men just for paid work, housing, or other needs that the lesbian communities can not do. Many people believe that in order to be a separatist feminist that you have to be completely separate but there are many ways to be a separatist.

Peer Review
Paragraph: The National Women's Suffrage Organization overcame many hardships, leading to the victory of having the ability to vote. "Citizenship represented a relationship to the larger society that was entirely and explicitly outside the boundaries of women's familial relations"(Dubois 66). Before this victory was won, women were not believed to have the right to vote, therefore not being considered true American citizens. The women of this organization fought for these rights and ultimately won them. On February 12th-18th, the National Women's Suffrage Association held a victory convention at the Congee Hotel in Chicago, to celebrate this great victory(National Women's Suffrage Association). Without this organization standing up for women's rights, women may not have had all the rights they have today.

Does the draft draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept on particular point of view?

- The draft tries to convince the reader that the organization is the reason why women now have the right to vote because of all the fighting they did.

Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral?

- There are no words or phrases that don't feel neutral

Does the draft make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people?

- No the draft states the name of the organization multiple times but does make statements enveloping all women in the United States.

Does the draft focus too much on negative or positive information?

- No it just gives information on how women won the right to vote. It includes negatives from before they won and the positives after but they are not overpowering.

Are there any unsourced statements in the draft, or statements that you can't find stated in the references?

- No there are two sources in the draft that correlate with all the information in the draft.

Final Article
Adding to the reception section:

There were two sides to the lesbian feminist movement; one thought that lesbian life was chosen for feminism and the other for their own desire. Many believed that separatist feminism was seeking to eliminate men from culture and furthermore, eliminate butch from lesbian culture. Butch women did not want this aspect of their identity to be taken away from them and therefore did not favor lesbian separatism. Separating completely from men is very difficult because they are an important part of or society and the parts that they play. Some believe that men are parasitic towards women and that we must completely separate from them. Others still interact with men just for paid work, housing, or other needs that the lesbian communities can not do. Many people believe that in order to be a separatist feminist that you have to be completely separate, but there are separatist communities that work in other ways.

Adding to the film section:

The film "She's Beautiful When She's Angry", is a dramatization about the modern women's movement from 1966 to 1971. It depicts the emergence of several organizations and the radicalization of ideals that women had in the feminist movement. Furthermore, the film discusses race, class, and sexual preference that many other films shy away from. Women discussed being separate completely from men and began the group called the Furies. Created in 1971, it included twelve lesbian feminists who intended to give lesbian feminism a voice through their own newspaper. They created their own school to teach women home and auto repair so that they would not be so dependent on men in their lives. While the group did not last very long their influence was felt for much longer.

I added content in two separate places of the Wiki article on Lesbian Separatism. I felt as though both of these areas was lacking and could use some more information. Therefore, in the reception section I added thoughts that others had about the movement and how society perceived it. The whole idea of lesbian separatism can be very hard to understand and it is difficult to do in real life. Another section that did not have much content was the section on films that included lesbian separatism in it. It was difficult to find other movies with material about lesbian separatism because many people do not know that much about it. I added information about one movie that we watched for class that talks a lot about the Furies and how they were formed which can help people understand what lesbian separatism looks like. Overall, I think adding this information into the article is very beneficial because it adds further understanding of what lesbian separatism is and what it looks like.