User:Noodles7441/Sam Ahkeah/Anespino Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Noodles7441


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Noodles7441/Sam_Ahkeah?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I am going to break up my peer review into the suggested sections to organize my feedback properly:

Lead

I feel like your first sentence is very abrupt and can you more of an overview of who Sam was. Some suggestions are to list all his titles or discussing the location he held office. Then continue to explain the other info you found.

Content

Content does feel very bare but that is understandable. Maybe you can find out more about what he did during his term as chairman as well as where he was located during these terms. Other than that, the content you do have feels relevant although disorganized.

Tone/Balance

Tone is good and fairly neutral.

Organization

Your article does not follow chronological order and with an article of this size, it makes it hard to follow. Consider talking about his achievements as chairman before discussing his death

ReferencesI wonder if there are any more historical documents to reflect the info taken from the websites you cite. It seems like Sam was a historical figure and maybe there is some concrete records of his time as a chairman. I know it is hard to find references outside of websites but I feel this might be an issue since your sources are not diverse.

Overall

Article is a good first draft with some slight chronological disruptions but the content is good. My only concern is the references cited all being from websites and the lack basic info such as location/region.