User:Normalusername123/Rhetorical situation/CoRi326 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Normalusername123


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Normalusername123/Rhetorical_situation?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rhetorical situation

Lead

 * Need to update the lead of the article to match the added information

Content

 * All content appears to be relevant to the topic of the article.
 * Considering what is already published in rhetorical situation, this addition to the article adds new information about rhetorical ecology that was missing in the currently publish article.
 * Link to "writing systems" in Cooper's section?
 * Importance of Cooper's web metaphor? Possibly explain how the impact of one would impact the other systems. Does Cooper give any specific examples you could incorporate?
 * Implementation of links to other Wikipedia pages

Tone and balance

 * "Biesecker takes issue" - This may be a biased comment as we aren't completely sure of what Biesecker is thinking? Would it make more sense to say that she "argued against" Bitzer's claim?
 * Commas after "article"?
 * "1975 article" and "1986 article" both sound a bit odd to me? I wonder if it would make more sense to state that something was found "in the [year] from [author's article]."
 * Are the numbers needed in Cooper's listing of different writing systems?

Sources and references

 * May want to introduce Biesecker by her first and last name in the section about her.

Organization

 * Smooth transitions are placed at the beginning of each paragraph and section.

Images and media

 * No media and image