User:NotNorwine/Robert "Buddy" Battle III/JSL22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

NotNorwine and Augustanastudent


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:NotNorwine/Robert_%22Buddy%22_Battle_III?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * No current version

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead- The first line of the lead is pretty good, but make sure it highlights what the other major sections of the article is going to be. More information could definitely be added to the lead. The lead should have more information previewing the article body.

Content- Content is good overall and neutral. More content should be added if possible. Some of the sentences and wording could be improved in order to make the reading more clear.

New Article- I believe that the sources are good, but maybe more should be added to get a better outside source or opinion. I would make sure to try and find some more information about the topic in order to be on par with similar articles. Maybe try and hyperlink some of the content to other articles as well.