User:NotNorwine/Robert "Buddy" Battle III/Strensch22 Peer Review

General info
NotNorwine and Augustanastudent
 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:NotNorwine/Robert_%22Buddy%22_Battle_III?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * (Does not exist)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead is a good start, only one sentence long but I understand why (no beginning info to add to, had to start with nothing). Yes it does clearly describe the articles topic. The lead does not include a brief introduction, to make it longer you can add a thesis type statement to tell the reader what you are about to inform them on in a shorter manner.The lead contains things only included in the article, nothing outside of it. it is concise, only negative is that it could be longer, just make sure it is not overly detailed, don't add too much. Overall, it is a good start and like I said it will be hard to make it longer when there was no prior bibliography to edit and you are coming up with this entirely on your own.

Yes the content is relevant to the topic, explains it well, could be a little more in depth. It is up to date, could add more in depth info about his life (I am sure you are not done yet though). Only thing missing is more in depth info. Next, the content is easy to read and concise, add some more about his life that is important. Finally, double check for spelling errors and other punctuation mistakes.