User:Noveljams/Conflict management/Fantasyreader22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Noveljams


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Noveljams/Conflict_management?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Conflict management

Evaluate the drafted changes
So far, Noveljams has copied and pasted a segment from the original article to edit/update. From my perspective, there have been no changes added to the article segment "International Conflict Management." However, from what is depicted on Noveljams' sandbox from the original article, I can make a few comments to help them edit it in the future. I would suggest specifying where the quote in the second sentence came from because it ultimately begins out of nowhere. Additionally, I would go into detail on how the quote related to international conflict management, rather than just saying it has been discussed in the business review. In relation to the examples below the first few sentences about international conflict management going awry, I would suggest utilizing more examples for the research by Renner instead of just stating "he recounted several episodes." Additionally, if you give more examples from different cultures, not just Asia, you can open the door for the reader to experience more perspectives. Lastly, in regard to these examples of international conflict management failing, I would also suggest you provide some research or exemplar of how these people who failed to dissipate the conflict can improve. For example, how someone could succeed in removing international conflict by being in touch with other peoples cultures, understanding how they do things differently, and so on. Overall, these are all things I'm sure you will be thinking about when you start editing your draft. Best of luck.