User:Npatel23/Financial Inclusion/Ambedia Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Npatel23
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Npatel23/Financial Inclusion

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Yes, I believe so. It does not include information on sections that I am assuming to not be as important. For example, bank stability, budget analysis, and inclusion intervention were not mentioned so I'm assuming they are not prominent.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? Concise

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes, I believe the content was actually updated through Nirali's edits.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? No

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes, Npatel23 did a great job in this aspect.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No, very balanced.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? None
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes
 * What are the strengths of the content added? addressed below
 * How can the content added be improved? addressed below

Overall evaluation
Hi Nirali,

I'm afraid I can't supply many criticisms to your article draft because I think you've done a wonderful job. I will highlight some of your greatest strengths and some clarification questions that I had:


 * 1) You've done a great job at implementing a neutral tone in your work. This has been very difficult for our classmates, as well as myself. When I was reading it I had no idea where you stood in terms of your opinions/beliefs which is a great indicator.
 * 2) As well as tone you referenced everything. Both of these aspects have made your article very encyclopedia-like, nice job!
 * 3) I had a question about your edits, I want to make sure I didn't miss any edits because your sandbox had a lot of information. You made a total of four ~paragraph edits, correct? I got this number by looking for the "My Edits:" + the New section and comparing contrasting the original article for the distinction to see where your work ended.
 * 4) I had another question regarding layout: Is the first edit going to replace the original Lead? If so, I think you did a great job at revising. I also noticed you used one of the same sources but you paraphrased much better. You made the Lead more concise and clear with your edits.
 * 5) Your second article was used to update a 2013 figure and I think that was very smart! I just have a question about whether you will be including the rest of your work in that edit into the existing section or replace it altogether?
 * 6) The history of financial inclusion was another smart add! You really knew how to find which areas which required work and how to make them flow smoothly and it shows.

As I've mentioned, I don't have much to critique. I really think you've set a high expectation for what to expect from this assignment and its wonderful to be able to learn from your example. If you have any questions or clarifications you'd like me to address I will happily do so.

Thank you for allowing me to peer review your work,

-Ambar