User:Nqm5156/Kendall School Division II for Negroes/Athorn17 Peer Review

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Nqm5156


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 * User:Nqm5156/Kendall School Division II for Negroes


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You guys! This article is excellent! I learned so much from your article. Seriously, you could pretty much post it as it is right now! The lead section is great! It is super easy to read and I feel like I have a great grasp of the topic after just reading the lead. And there was no redundancy when compared with the rest of the article. Nice job! This article definitely seems to meet notability requirements. The content is relevant and the organization of the rest of the article makes sense and flows well. Your sources are well chosen and you cited appropriately throughout your article. I have only a couple minor comments:


 * “On March 3, 1905, the Government passed an act that forbid children of color from attending Kendall School for the Deaf on Gallaudet University’s campus.” —This seems like it should start a new paragraph.
 * “This segregation history has become a huge part for the Black Deaf Community.” —I don’t doubt that this is true, but are there sources from which this fact was taken?
 * The second paragraph in the Background on Louise Burrell Miller section had a few sentences which were a bit awkward to read. It would be worth while to double check the flow of the sentences in this paragraph. It felt a bit choppy in the middle.
 * The link for this article ( "Center for Black Deaf Studies") is doing weird things to my computer. Seems like suspicious activity every time I click it. Just wanted to let y’all know.