User:Nqm5156/Kendall School Division II for Negroes/Klowe7 Peer Review

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 * User:Nqm5156/Kendall School Division II for Negroes


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Very interesting article! Thank you for providing all of this information, I learned a lot!

Just a few suggestions:

-Watch out for language that isn't totally neutral (like in the first sentence under the "History of Segregation" subheading

-How were other races involved? Were Hispanic or Asian students segregated as well? Maybe including a section on that would also add some really interesting information that not a lot of people know about

-Is Kenneth Miller's address necessary in the "Background on Louise Burrell Miller and Her Family" section? Sharing his address (even if it's an old one) could be a little dangerous

-I would change the formatting of some of the subheadings, like not including a "&", also pay a little more attention to capitalization overall.