User:Nqm5156/Kendall School Division II for Negroes/Qal19999 Peer Review

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Nqm5156


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 * User:Nqm5156/Kendall School Division II for Negroes


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Hi there, Quinn here peer reviewing you guys! I learned so much from reading this article. I think the challenge will be to make the tone even more neutral. For example instead of saying "Black children weren't treated properly at all," you could cite some specifics of what it was like for black students at the time. I would also omit "Louise Miller knew how important early education is for a deaf child." There were some comma splices and typos. Content wise, I thought it was really thorough and I like that it was organized chronologically for the most part. If anything, I wonder if there were any challenges to desegregation post Brown v Board that you could discuss, or more information about what prompted Gallaudet to put up the memorial in 2017. You were very diligent with your citations and I did not have any issues with the links. I'm struggling to come up with feedback because this article was so strong! Fantastic job.