User:Ntal123/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Preventive nutrition - Wikipedia

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article because I am interested in the role nutrition has in preventing disease, improving mood and performance (physical and cognitive), and maintaining good long-term health. It matters because nutrition has the ability to help improve the health of the public which may result in a decreased burden on the healthcare system and has many individual benefits (a few listed above). This article is part of a WikiProject and classified as a "Stub" article. My first impression of this article was that it is underdeveloped, not written in the correct style for Wikipedia, and information needs to be added and presented in a way that is objective and informative. Citations also need to be added in places, and too many quotes are used. Currently, the article is identified as being written like a argumentative/reflection/personal essay. I want to help create a more complete article and correct these issues because I believe preventative nutrition is an important topic.

Evaluate the article
Lead section

The introductory sentence states what preventative nutrition is in a clear and concise manner. One adjustment I would make is removing the first “or,” so it would read “…goal of preventing, delaying, or reducing the impacts of disease…” The second and third sentences seem repetitive to me. Could be reworded and mention some of the other benefits and points that will be discussed in the article. Take out the quote. Introduce which diseases will be focused on (eg. obesity, diabetes, cardiovascular disease). Mention various diets that will be discussed (Mediterranean Diet). The description of the article’s major sections is lacking. “Athletics” is a major section in the article and not mentioned in the introduction. Other topics discussed that are not specifically mentioned in the intro include, mental health, gut bacteria, and benefits in elderly populations. Type 2 diabetes is not discussed in article, but it is mentioned in the intro.

Content

Content is mostly relevant to the topic and content is up to date. More content should be added (gather more information from high quality sources), and organization of the article should be improved. Remove quotes, they are not necessary. “Athletics” section does not seem relevant based on the introduction of the article. However, I think it can be improved because preventive nutrition is important in athletes too. It mentions a few studies done in specific populations (eg. hypertension in China). It does not address topics related to historically underrepresented populations (or it could be more specific). There are equity gaps that can be improved.

Tone and balance

The article is not neutral. Claims do appear to be biased toward a position: preventative nutrition is good. Phrases like, “there are endless benefits to eating healthy, and everybody knows this,” are used. Uses language like “bad diet,” which is also subjective and elusive. Viewpoints only present for the benefits of preventative nutrition (no risks or limitations mentioned). This article attempts to persuade the reader in favour of one position.

I would change the “Overlooked aspects” section title and rewrite that section from a neutral perspective. It discusses different barriers to eating healthy including, financial struggle, time constraints, and the convenience of fast food.

The conclusion mentions Tom Brady and he is not mentioned anywhere else in the article. Writer assumes Brady’s success is because of his “impeccable diet,” no citation is added here.

Sources and references

Sources are current (all within last 10 years). Sources include editorial, websites, a review and journal article (both by same author), and an article on “Child Diet and the School Nutrition Environment” (which is not discussed in depth). Additional high-quality resources should be used because there are many available peer reviewed articles on preventative nutrition. Citations also need to be added in places. All the links all work. Disease prevention link goes to “Preventative healthcare” Wikipedia article. Additional images could be added, and captions could be improved to enhance the understanding of the image.

Overall: this article needs lots of work and I want to help improve it.