User:Nyankonyan/735–737 Japanese smallpox epidemic/Ryangrady8 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

NyanKonyan


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nyankonyan/735%E2%80%93737_Japanese_smallpox_epidemic?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 735–737 Japanese smallpox epidemic

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello all well done on your article thus far! I want to start to say that the lead is perfect, it's clear and concise while getting straight to the point. And it also has the eye catching statistics that will engage the reader. I think the culture section of the article draft thus far is really well done and I think it does an excellent job of explaining how the disease was handled by the early Japanese and why they acted in the way they did, such as wearing red to scare off the small pox "demon". I think you can definitely find a lot of information about this and I think if you can find anything around the taboos surrounding small pox and what it meant to the people could be a really interesting part of the article.

Upon looking up each of the sources they seems reputable and like they certainly have a lot of information, however, you definitely could add a few more for the final draft which I'm sure you already had that in mind.