User:Nyaronya/Mother/Android/Gisselolzba Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Nyaronya's article.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nyaronya/Mother%2FAndroid?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mother/Android

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

There was no change in the lead.

Content

The plot section has been polished. Instead of having 9 paragraphs, the draft combines the second and third into one, etc. making it far smoother and shorter. The production section has been expanded. This was a good choice, the writing subsection in the production part is important in my opinion. It gives valuable information and insight into the film. This user also added critical responses to the film, and cited four different review sources. Although the reviews are not particularly favorable, I don't think they are meant to influence the reader in any way.

All the content added is up to date and relevant.

Tone and balance

The tone is matter-of-fact and unbiased. The facts are presented and cited correctly.

Sources and references

All the content in this article is backed up by sources which are reliable. I didn't;t see any peer reviewed journal articles but I don't think they're necessary. It is properly cited and the links work.

Organization

The content is clear, concise, and organized. I did not see any pressing grammatical errors. The only thing that I feel is a bit off, is the sentence "An android that was owned by the Olsens wishes Sam a Happy Halloween instead of Christmas, the first sign that something is amiss." (I underlined the "problem", which again, isn't a big issue). In the original, the tense is present, which I think is more accurate and less awkward than using the past tense.

Images and media

There are no images.

Overall impressions

This article definitely feels more complete. The main strengths are the additional information in the production and reception sections.