User:NyunN/Wildlife garden/Camillemarie222 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * NyunN

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:NyunN/Wildlife garden
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Wildlife garden

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead has a does a great job of introducing the topic and giving good background into explaining what a wildlife garden is. The sentences the intro might be a bit long and run on, but other than that the information added was necessary and gives great insight and information that was not present before.

The article body content that was added is very informative and gives examples of what planning the garden can do for wildlife and the greater environment. Some elements that could be added to the planning section or maybe given its own section entirely could be the benefits of drought tolerance and water conservation that comes from planting native species. As well as the benefits of using drip irrigation systems in wildlife gardens which usually require much less water consumption.

In the choice of plant section the addition was smart, there is some grammatical errors which are understandable as this is a draft.

The benefits of having a wildlife garden section was added which was a brave choice, I think it adds very important information as well as incentivizing people to beautify there homes as well as benefiting the environment and themselves. Again the aspect of water conservation could be brought up in this section as well as water cost savings. I also think it would be important to note the negative effects of what having "habitat islands" as discussed in class such as species isolation and higher risk of species diet when there is not a proper amount of surrounding habitat sanctuaries. Or maybe that would be better as an entirely different article. Just a thought.

Overall this is a GREAT JOB! Also it has given me ideas and taught me how to do the drafting process properly as I was not following the instruction given for mine.