User:OOCHIAI/Yuki Tanada/Orilta Peer Review

General info
OCCHIAI
 * Whose work are you reviewing ? (provide username)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Yuki Tanada


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Yuki Tanada

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Positive aspects of the draft:


 * This is great that you created a subsection going more in-depth into her films.
 * The quotes you chose are relevant because they give information on both narrative elements and issues the characters deal with in the films.
 * You added a reliable source, which is a very good point.

What can potentially be improved:


 * It would be useful to associate the titles of the films with the Wikipedia links where information on these films can be found.
 * Maybe it would be good to introduce your quotations by giving the name of the author and the book/article.
 * The words "very well highlighted" might appear as biased, so perhaps you can try to find a more neutral way to convey the same idea (by keeping "highlighted" only for example?)

General suggestions


 * I feel a bit confused about the title of this new sub-section. With the highlight on the fact Yuki Tanada is Japanese ("Japanese Female Filmmaker"), we would at first expect to read some information on the way her films deal with the representation of Japan, or the way she positions herself within the Japanese film industry or society more broadly. It seems like this section deals more with feminist issues in Yuki Takada's films so you can maybe find a title that would be relevant to that perspective.

(Great job overall !)