User:OTUAustinOligario/Gaming computer/Muskl1098 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(OTUAustinOligario)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:OTUAustinOligario/Gaming_computer?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
All of the content that is present in the sandbox is relevant to the article topic as well most of the content was made more concise so that more information is provided with more efficient use of wording. Mostly everything that was covered in the Wikipedia page was relevant to the article topic. There is good grammar, use of neutral narrative and many references to back up all the information that is stated. One thing that stood out for me was that the summary seemed too short and maybe could have provided more information to make the reader aware of the subject. The article was neutral, there was no identified use of opinions or subjective wording which expressed any type of bias towards the subject. For example, under the subcategory of use cases, Austin used only statements "The most popular use case of a gaming computer is to play video games ". Although the "use cases" category contains relevant information on gaming computers, more could have been mentioned to really inform the reader. An example of such could have been to add examples of specific pc components that people depend on with the company names, or examples of the top selling computers from a particular company. The links all correspond correctly to the information presented on the page. It is summarized appropriately where significant information of each article is well presented. Also, there is a vast amount of links embedded in significant words such "CPU" or "GPU" which are very important components found in gaming computers. After each sentence it seems there is at least one citations provided for the information presented on the page. Information that was gathered from the resources could have been biased however because some components that are mentioned could be subject to sponsorships; meaning that a component that is promised to do such thing may not do it correctly or the best, it could have just been an advertised product which would favor this product over another. Most of the information is up to date, this was well cited partially because gaming computers change so frequently it is not hard to obtain the latest information on general component parts.