User:Oabrown23/Ayanna Kim Thomas/CommodoreVe Peer Review

General info
Username: Oabrown23
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * UseUser:Oabrown23/Ayanna Kim Thomas - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ayanna Kim Thomas - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall, this is a well written article about Ayanna Kim Thomas. The information that is provided is presented in a manner that is clear and concise. The tone is neutral, and the article is not biased. There is one small issue for the information box of this subject, their alma matters, and respective degrees are not available, but are present in the Education and Career. This information in the information box will strengthen it. The addition of a photo of this subject would also strengthen it.

The person seems to meet the requirements for notability, with numerous sources talking about the subject as well as numerous publications which will aid in their notability. Early life section is short, if more information is available, I would recommend trying ti fill it out.

There is a strong lead section, but I feel like it is a little cluttered. The mentioning of her past education can be saved for the education system or explained a little further. For example, "Dr. Thomas graduated from Wesleyan University and the University of Washington." Could be removed or modified, as in its current phrasing it sounds like this statement was added later on as an afterthought.

Overall, this is an impressive wiki on this subject!