User:Obevo/Aten/Swaggyswaps Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Obevo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Obevo/Aten?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Aten

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead is very strong. It's neutral and holds a lot of information pertaining to Aten and the aspects of their rise and fall of worship without giving too much away in the opening. Although, Aten himself doesn't have a personal creation myth, he plays a role in the creation myth of many other gods within his rite.

Content: Maybe a section on the controversy Aten caused could be added. Reflecting on the reason why King Tut had to reinstate the old pantheon and worship. The content is good, informative, comes from a central standpoint. Plenty on images and media. Consider adding more about the controversy and unrest Aten's worship had instead of it just being the "Question of Monotheism" and "After Akhenaten" sections. There's never really a focal point on why there needs to be a section about the aftermath of his rule -- it seems out of place this way. His name is said several times throughout the article but not much more than "Akhenaten instated the worship of Aten." Content focuses mainly on the religious practices around Aten.

Tone and Balance: Good tone and balance. Again, very neutral.

Sources and References: Your personal to-do list covers this. Good use of references and sources.

Organization: Organization of the article is good. It starts out with Aten and goes from there which flows nicely. Consider adding in the Akhenaten section just to not make the "After Akhenaten" part seem out of place. Also consider moving the "Worship" section closer to the "Religion" section, as they go hand-in-hand and putting "Iconography" after "Worship" or under "Architecture" or under the "Etymology and Origin"

Images and Media: A good amount. You said you would find more information for the images which is a good start. The amount of media in the article is good.

Overall Impression: Your personal to-do list looks like it covers most of the things I would have critiqued on. Good article and lots of additions which is phenomenal. Great work :))