User:Obevo/Temple of Apollo (Delphi)/Gooseberri Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Obevo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Obevo/Temple of Apollo (Delphi)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Temple of Apollo (Delphi)

Lead
Very good! It may not be necessary to have that sentence about Theodosius in the lead- it says basically the same thing as the sentence about him at the end of the architecture paragraph (he doesn't seem all that important).

{See Neutrality Section}

Clarity
I think it may be nice to have the Pythia under it's own section instead of under historic use/ importance. It may just be me but it seems to get lost in the article, even though the Oracle is one of the most important and documented aspects of the temple.

Balance
I don't have much to add, I think you did well!

Neutrality
Your last sentence in the lead is not all that neutral, it may not be necessary to state.

Be careful of the "some historians have argued..." statement, get more specific.

Otherwise it looks good!

Other comments
It would be helpful (specifically for peer-reviews but maybe also for you) if you differentiated within your sandbox what you have added vs what was already in the article (using bold text).

I am so impressed with how much you were able to add to this article!