User:ObnoxiousAdri

Crème brûlée

 * Spelling of name is debated
 * Lead could be expanded
 * Order of topics is sufficient but could be tweaked
 * Crema Catalan heading could be made into a subheading
 * Necessity of ingredients list is questionable
 * Could benefit from some copyediting

Xenophobia

 * Strong focus on Jews
 * Could benefit from a broader explanation
 * Strong focus on discrimination
 * Addition of concern towards maintaining culture could be added
 * Could benefit from some copyediting

Choosing Articles to Work on
The following articles are my choices for possible projects.


 * Frogger
 * List of races and species in The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy
 * Apple pie

Write up the problem:

 * Lead is not clear
 * Does not adequately summarize contents


 * Improper tone
 * Written like an opinion essay
 * Neutral point of view issues


 * Lack of citations
 * Structure
 * Long paragraphs
 * Headings are not clear
 * No images
 * See also section is lacking


 * Context is not provided
 * Jargon and technical wording

List your tasks:

 * Ensure lead summarizes all of the content
 * Remember to include changes on Environmental law


 * Rewrite for tone
 * Use formal language
 * Correct to a neutral point of view


 * Mark instances that need citations
 * Improve structure
 * Shorten/break up paragraphs
 * Rename and organize headings
 * Group together similar content
 * Avoid redundancy across sections
 * Include images
 * Add articles to the See also section


 * Provide context for the subject
 * Use clear, precise, and accurate terms


 * Ensure past Talk posts have been taken into consideration
 * General copyediting

Write up the problem:

 * Lead is not clear
 * Does not adequately summarize contents
 * Uses technical wording


 * Lack of citations
 * Structure
 * Organization is strange
 * Headings are not clear


 * Context is not provided
 * Jargon and technical wording

List your tasks:

 * Clarify lead
 * Summarize all of the content
 * Simplify and explain technical language


 * Mark instances that need citations
 * Improve structure
 * Utilize structure from featured video game articles
 * Rename and organize headings
 * Group together similar content
 * Avoid redundancy across sections


 * Provide context
 * Use clear, precise, and accurate terms


 * Ensure past Talk posts have been taken into consideration
 * General copyediting