User:October2222/Mental health inequality/Michaeld09 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

October2222


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:October2222/Mental health inequality - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
October2222 has a good start here, and I especially am impressed with the references portion of the article. From a first glance, more information may need to be added. Not a lot of information, but a little more to get the point across a tad more clearer. I also think that adding a lead and organization the article in a more clean way would be beneficial. Adding pictures with captions and a few paragraphs that bring everything together would be very useful here. All in all, I think the article is at a good place and more additions plus more clean up on the organizational side of things would help.