User:Octobercosmos/Desert greening/Glitter25 Peer Review

General info
Nayebean & Octobercosmos
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Desert greening
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Desert greening

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

The lead lacks a general opening sentence and skips to mention the definition of desert greening. According to its text, desert greening is the process of reforesting deserts in order to restore their natural ecosystems. The lead made it clear that ice-capped or permafrost zones are not included in this idea, which is applicable to both hot and cold deserts.

The article outlines the main ideas of desert greening and some of its possible advantages, even if it doesn't specifically split down the parts into smaller ones. In addition, the example used helped shape a clearer understanding of the UN’s efforts to prevent desertification and add more greenery to the dry by planting trees.

To sum up, the essay presents the idea of desert greening and describes its goals and possible benefits without using the typical opening statement.

Context:

Overall, it is safe to say that the general context provided in the wiki is relevant information. The information used is supported by numerous amounts of different methods including, environmental remediation and ecoforestry, landscaping, green infrastructure, agriculture, etc.

In terms of the content's reliability, I can confirm the present state of the text, such as the "Great Green Wall" was last updated in June 2023. Therefore this clarifies the accuracy and ensurity of the article that ultimately supported their main paper. In addition, the other context that is provided is related to the theme of the article.

It doesn't specifically address issues pertaining to historically marginalized groups. It does, implicitly relate to the more general problem of environmental sustainability, which may have consequences for populations in dry areas.

Tone and Balance:

Since it mainly focuses on providing information about the process of desert greening, its advantages, methodologies, and various projects without explicitly advocating a specific viewpoint, the content in the offered article appears to be generally neutral.

Sources and References:

The article would benefit from adding secondary evidence. Furthermore, it's a good idea to cross-reference the data with other reliable sources to guarantee correctness. The sources are relatively thorough and provide extensive and explicit details of the subtopics.

Although have taken a look at the citations, the average year that the citations used in the article used, was roughly around the years 2008-2013. In summary, the article would definitely benefit in accuracy and relevance if newer information was cited. Adding peer-reviewed sources is also a recommendation I would make for this Wiki article. Oftentimes peer-reviewed work, thoroughly, tackles particular topics and the study behind them. Providing a scholarly point of view would make the article not only more resourceful but more interesting.

Organization:

The article's material is typically straightforward to read, well-written, and clear. It offers a thorough introduction to the subject, going through various aspects of desert greening, including benefits, techniques, and some particular projects. The subheadings provided a sufficient amount of information and were structured in a clear way, this feature may help readers find exactly what they're looking for. Minor grammatical errors were spotted, but nothing significant.

Images and Media:

This was one of the first things I noticed about the wiki article, was that it had very few visuals. This article has a total of 3 images. The article could benefit from more images and media content. Adding such features will not only give primary evidence to back up the abundance of information they've provided in their paragraphs but also help a broader range of readers understand what they're reading. Having a picture in your head, of the information you've just interpreted, could make things much clearer. The images are not laid out in an appealing way. Therefore, I would recommend larger, more appealing photos.

Overall:

The article offers a deeper comprehension of desert greening, including techniques, and particular initiatives associated with it.

Pros Exhibited in the article were: comprehensive information, an abundance of citations, perspectives from around the world, and the impact desert greenery has on us socially.

Cons Exhibited were: visual aids, relevancy of the citations that were included, and future planned developments.

Overall, the context of the understanding was well written but considering what I have mentioned in the peer review may make this an even stronger piece.