User:Odowdall/Multi-compartment model/Grace.volk7 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User: Odowdall


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Multi-compartment model


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Multi-compartment model

Evaluate the drafted changes
Only the first part of the article is copied into the sandbox, so I will just be looking at that part of the original article compared to the changes made.

The third paragraph in the sandbox was added to the original, and I think it is an important addition. It is easy to read and definitely adds to the quality of the page. The tone is neutral, and it is not biased.

If possible, I think it would be worthwhile to try to divide this information into a lead section and a different heading. This seems like a lot of information for just the lead section, but I am not sure if it would be possible with the information that is presented. I also think it might be useful to add a source to the information you added, unless that is common knowledge that does not require a source.

Overall, I think your paragraph is very well written and adds to the quality of the article. It strengthened the article as a whole and made it a better Wikipedia page.