User:Ogran004/Janie Eickhoff/Ncarpenter1805 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Janie Eickhoff


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ogran004/Janie_Eickhoff?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The picture of Janie Eickhoff should be one of the first things we see along with the lead for the reader to get a personal face to face feel while learning about said person. As for your lead paragraph, I do think these quotes you have down are relevant to who Janie Eickhoff is, however, try to form them more into flowing sentence fragments. I would like to say, I enjoyed the "Early Sports" portion as it touched on her early life within sports and not just her early life. I also think the achievement section is important and well laid out, however, maybe flip these two sections to make the flow of her career a little bit more notable.