User:Ohebert19/Meteorology (Aristotle)/Jonathan D12 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ohebert19


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ohebert19/Meteorology_%28Aristotle%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Meteorology (Aristotle)

Peer Review by Jonathan D12
I love that you added that this is the "oldest comprehensive treatise on the subject of meteorology". I think adding this, for those unaware Aristotle authored this subject (like me), gives background to Meteorology. I think the major critique I have (albeit minor, seeing as though this is a sandbox) is fixing the structure of your draft. You have a lot to work with, so I do think you should get more meaty with some Books than others, if you don't have the time. That way, someone can come back and go into greater detail in another one of the books. Any detail, and more of it, is always good. However, as for the as for the content you have, you are doing well so far. Particularly with the body of your article, which seems to expand on both Meteorology by Aristotle, and also equating this book to the 17th century and involving facts about the field of Meteorology in of itself. Love that! Good work so far.