User:Ohio55

Hey! My name is Brianna. I am currently in a History of Psychology class. I created this Wikipedia accout and will be editing pieces on psychology for my class!

Hello Brianna, This is Dr. D. The good news is that there is one article that will work for you among all those you identified. The bad news is that the one article does not give you any choice! My comments follow, but I suggest that if you are not totally enthused about editing "Daniel Stern", you should delete these artiles and upload a few more that relate more to older history of psychology. Let me know if you choose to do that. Thank you! Adaptive Behaviors—this is too broad a topic, very general, for our purposes. Not recommended Spacing effect—I don’t recommend this article because it may be merged with another article on Wikipedia--see the note at the top of the article. Chunking (psychology)—already selected by a student earlier Affect infusion model-this model is fairly recent and the topic will not yield, I’m afraid, enough material of a psychology historical nature to make your task less than very challenging. I don’t recommend focusing on this article for your project. Fields of science—too broad; more of a listing and not enough content demands for our class. Door-in-the-face technique—too narrow. I advise against it because of paucity of material of historical nature. Daniel Stern (psychologist)—this article is fine for editing for your project. WebFlower1 (talk) 03:02, 2 March 2012 (UTC)

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Hey Brianna! This is Sarah (your first Peer-reviewer). I went ahead and made some comments on the word doc you had sent me with your edits to the article. I'm going to email it to you and also upload it Isidore. I figured I would type some of the comments below, but not all, since you'll see them when you get the word doc back. :)

1. It's definitely a great idea to change the article picture to that of the individual the article is about and not a couch.

2. The grammatical/word edits and changes that you made throughout were all legitimate, good edits.

3. About halfway through the article (in the motherhood constellation portion), there's a quote that you introduced, I'm just wondering if it's missing a word in it, (you'll see what I mean in the word doc)

4. I think that most of the information you added about the different stages of the layered self is good, however it would probably help to have them all formatted the same way (again, I mentioned in the word doc that this could just be due to the fact that I'm reviewing it in word)

5. As far as the reference goes, I think it's in the correct format.

Okay, all of that is stuff that I saw just through your word doc, but in looking at the actual article, I have a couple more things:

For the Biography and then the Bibliography, there are a few words or phrases that show up in red but are available as links. However if I click on them it doesn't take me to a page for those words or phrases but rather to a page that says there aren't any wikipedia pages with those names or phrases. I know you told me you were still working on getting all of your corrections back on the article since they had been taken down, so you're probably aware of this or working on it, but I just thought I'd include it. Overall I would say that you're making some great improvements to this article. Hope this helps!

Sarah (24.166.210.44 (talk) 20:20, 29 March 2012 (UTC))