User:Okhauger/sandbox

11/27/17

Final Draft of Article

My group's assignment is in Sofia Rivas's sandbox.

11/10/17

Continue Improving Article

My group's assignment is in Sofia Rivas's sandbox.

10/17/17

Expanding Your Draft

My group's assignment is in Sofia Rivas's sandbox.

10/13/17

Drafting Your Article Assignment:

My group's assignment is found in Sofia Rivas's sandbox. Additionally, I copy and pasted our work below:

New topic: Our group plans to improve aspects of the Occupy Wall Street Wikipedia page that are less developed by discussing criticisms to the movement and reasons why it did not succeed in accomplishing its initial intent. This section is very undeveloped compared to other sections of the Occupy Movement. While there have been a number of criticisms against the movement, very few are articulated in the Wikipedia article. In addition, the current criticism section is too vague and anecdotal. We would like to incorporate a greater variety of criticism along with more factual information leading to why the movement allegedly failed. Below are nine criticisms we have identified that we want to incorporate into our article. We believe that all of these points are relevant to OWS. We think that they should be included in the criticisms section and that they are notable in the eyes of Wikipedia.

Below are criticisms that we believe should be included:

1. Lack of defined leadership/ hierarchy (http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/pops.12054/full)

2. Lack of clear agenda/ demands

3. Demands that go beyond acknowledgment and inclusion (Decolonize Wall Street! Situating Indigenous Critiques of the Occupy Wall Street Movement)

4. Ignoring the voice of minority (The concept of 99% does not encompass lower class individuals and their opinions on the matter) Many of the participants were actually white and middle class

5. The “occupy factor”: The movement was too tied to its home base, a small symbolic tent-city near Wall Street, and in other similar parks in Boston, San Francisco, and other cities. In order to rally scalable national support people needed to see marchers taking to the streets rather than largely hanging out in a park, which served, rightly or wrongly, to portray the Zuccotti Park inhabitants as drifters, vagrants, and freeloaders rather than committed protesters.

6. The Wrong Message: Some people think that the movement essentially turned into a “rich bad/poor good” theme. That the indictment of everyone in the “1%” (including passionate, dedicated, extremely generous liberals like George Soros, Warren Buffett, Bill Gates and the Kennedys) was the wrong message. People also believe that OWS advocated for class warfare and that equality and fairness for all through reasonable government regulation and taxation should have been the real message.

7. Political nature of the movement - doesn’t include who the candidate is or which party they represent, but rather social and economic complaints (can we explain this a little better)

8. Movement didn’t accomplish any change or goals, (i.e did banks really change anything, did corporations really do anything different)

9. The Movement fizzled extremely quickly and was powerful only in late 2011 through 2012

10/10/17

Finalize Your Topic:

My group plans create a new section within the Occupy Wall Street Wikipedia page in which we discuss institutional and corporate responses to the social movement. Below is a list of articles and books that we can cite and use for our contributions.

1. This Changes Everything: Occupy Wall Street and the 99% Movement

https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=fqAsfwo2gxkC&oi=fnd&pg=PP2&dq=occupy+wall+street+failure&ots=oZDwuYvZG7&sig=shrsyk7rN6t2OlTEOMixggJeTWU#v=onepage&q=occupy%20wall%20street%20failure&f=false

2. Anatomy of Protest in the Digital Era: A Network Analysis of Twitter and Occupy Wall Street

http://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/14742837.2013.830969

3. Occupy Wall Street: After the Anarchist Moment by Jodi Dean

4. The Digital Evolution of Occupy Wall Street

http://journals.plos.org/plosone/article?id=10.1371/journal.pone.0064679

5. Wall Street As Community of Fate: Toward Financial Industry Self-Regulation

http://www.jstor.org/stable/41038809?seq=1#page_scan_tab_contents

Choose Possible Topics Assignment:

Topic 1- Occupy Wall Street Page: add other locations such as universities and international locations where interest towards Occupy Wall Street was shown and link the Occupy Wall Street location link to the section.

Topic 2- Occupy Cal: The effects of Occupy Cal and how it might have changed the culture of the Berkeley population, specifically career interests.

Topic 3- Lack of Organized Agenda: We could address the problem of unclear demands in OWS.

Topic 4- Responses to OWS: talk about financial institutions and corporations and their responses (new regulations, culture, pay, minority outreach, etc.)

I am working on a class project to edit topics related to Occupy Wall Street with Sofia Rivas and Zeeshan Rauf on Sofia Rivas's sandbox. Article Evaluation
 * 1) WhyIStatyed/WhyILeft

The Wikipedia article on WhyIStayed/WhyILeft did a good job of providing an overview for the movement's and hashtag's purpose. Everything in the article is relevant and related to the movement. The article outlined events involving the hashtag in a neutral manner, providing the responses from Beverly Gooden and Janay Rice. The dialogue could have more detail and context. Janay's response to the hashtag is represented as she denies her relationship as being abusive. A response from Ray Rice would add more to the article if he commented on the situation. Also, more concrete examples of the hashtag being used could add to the article. The ten links work for the citations. On the Talk Page of the article, some people have commented on how the article is missing more background on domestic violence. I agree with this analysis. It makes me wonder about other instances of domestic abuse are linked with the hashtag. I would be interested to see if any other famous people or businesses commented on the situation. The article is rated Start-Class is part of WikiProject Article for a course assignment.Okhauger (talk) 22:33, 15 September 2017 (UTC)