User:Oldchien.rb/Chedworth Roman Villa/Nathangooi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Oldchien.rb


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Oldchien.rb/Chedworth Roman Villa


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Chedworth Roman Villa

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- I really liked addition of "so far discovered" in this section as it is very possible that many of these Roman villas may have not been discovered yet

Content

- Content added provides a clearer, more detailed history from a reliable source.

- It provides a clearer picture of the villa and how it affected future buildings.

Tone and Balance

- The addition of "This clearly Christian symbol had..." in the Nymphaeum section may not seem to be neutral to readers. Maybe changing the wording, with an addition of a source will help back up this statement.

- Other than this, I found your additions to be very neutral, only stating facts and not showing any bias towards any position.

Sources and References

- The Roger Goodburn source is a reliable secondary source

- I was unable to find your references to Wilson 2002. The links were not working.

- I was able to find an article that may help with your research. It gives the history and blueprints of the layout that could potentially be useful. I will link it below

- “The Roman Villa at Chedworth.” The Antiquaries Journal, vol. 4, no. 4, 1924, pp. 418–418., doi:10.1017/S0003581500091939.

Organization

- I found it very well organized and you added necessary details when needed.

- Most of your additions flowed nicely

- The last additions under the History section may or may not have been ideas/additions that you were going to incorporate somehow. It just feels like it may be a little out of place.

- There were no spelling or grammar errors

Images and Media

- One addition that you could do once we learn about adding images and media would be to add a map or blueprint of the villa.

- The addition of these pictures could potentially help readers have a better picture of what the villa looks like

- I also think that the caption of the picture provided in the Nymphaeum section could be more detailed with regards to its location.

Overall impressions

- Overall, I really enjoyed reading your additions

- You added lots of details of it's history that improved my understanding of the villa. This definitely helped the article feel more complete.

- I think the use of different sources will help improve your content.