User:Oliver1445/Leila Gerstein/Pharmacy03 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Oliver1445


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Oliver1445/Leila_Gerstein?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Leila Gerstein

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead section of this article doesn't cover the general sections of the article. There is no mention of the biography section or the personal life section. This lead is concise, but could use more details from the article

Content: The content of the article is overall related to the topic, as it is all centered around Leila Gerstein. There is content missing in the personal life section and biography, these sections could benefit from more research and information being added.

Tone and Balance: The content is given in a neutral tone, there doesn't seem to be any attempt at persuasion. All parts of the article have an objective tone with the information provided.

Sources: Most of the content is backed up by sources, however the section that lists Leila Gerstein's writing credits has many un-sourced claims. This would be an area to improve the article by finding sources for these credits. Most of the sources that are used are reliable, but there are a few questionable ones. one example is: http://thefutoncritic.com/news/2011/02/09/development-update-wednesday-february-9-627522/9128/. Sources like these could be replaced with more reputable ones in the future.

Organization: The article was easy to follow, and had no spelling/ grammatical errors that I could find. One suggestion I have is to move the personal life section to be directly after the biography section.

Images: The article does not make use of any photos. I would suggest at least an image of Leila Gerstein, but images of the projects that Gerstein has worked on would also be nice.

Response

Thank you for these suggestions. I really appreciate you taking the time to go into detail on how I can improve this article! Oliver1445