User:Oliver Lizzhelm/User:Oliver Lizzhelm/sandbox/Sawyerbl Peer Review

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Oliver Lizzhelm
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Oliver Lizzhelm/sandbox - Wikipedia
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I think the article did a great job explaining in detail what the game is all about. I like how you can reference some of the words that would be hard to understand. I don't fully understand what the game is exactly, but one thing I would elaborate a little more on is how the game came about in the United States, and why they only offered a single-player game.

I don't think there is too much more that you can do to make this article better. I think you explained things very well and I think the viewers that are into the game will understand what you are referring to.

I like how you could go over words that I didn't understand, and it would give you a definition of what it is to help explain what you are looking at. I will be adding that to my article.

I think the article had a good lead section. You did a great job explaining what the game was before you started going into the history of the game. I think the lead does reflect the importance of the article. Overall, the article is well-balanced and well-explained. I don't know much about the game but I feel like there is a great amount of information on the game in the article.

The structure of the article is well organized and the information that you are giving makes sense. Everything in the article is important to what you are trying to say. This is a neutral article there is no persuasion, and very straight to the point.

You were very neutral in the article and straight to the point on the information.

All the statements in the articles are connected to a reliable source and are easy to look at.

Based on this review some of the things that I think that I need to change in my article is reference some words if any that I think would be hard for people to understand. In my article, I am wanting to add more to the legal charges that the state of Florida brought against the treasure Hunter. I also think that I need to change the way that I organize my page.