User:Olivesaregreen/Nanomia bijuga/Rexyshy8 Peer Review

General info
Czerwinz, BeanoMill092, Malloryfitzhenry, Andrew.gans, Kao24, Olivesaregreen
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Olivesaregreen/Nanomia_bijuga?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Nanomia bijuga

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

I like the edited lead section, as the original one did not use correct reference formatting. A lot of good information was added to get a better brief description of the organism. However, I would suggest adding that they swim hundreds of meters throughout the day, as the original lead mentions, as this can be a good addition for a general description of the organism. Additionally, maybe organize the lead as one intro paragraph rather than 3 mini sections. The lead discusses information that the rest of the article will cover.

Content

In the "Behavior" section, the last sentence mentions that there is another predator escape behavior; however, it does not mention what it is, so I would suggest to briefly describe the other behavior, as well as add its corresponding reference citation. Overall, the content that is presented is very relevant in describing Nanomia bijuga and does not contain any information that can be considered not useful. I would suggest to include more information on how Nanomia bijuga use their tentacles specifically to sting, since this was mentioned in the lead they they "employ stinging tentacles for hunting and defense".

Additionally, I would encourage the article to include some images to help relate the content being demonstrated in a visual depiction for better understanding.

Tone and Balance

In the "Distribution and habitat" section, I would suggest to change "epi/meso-pelagic" to "they are both an epipelagic and mesopelagic species" to make the tone of the article more grammatically formal. Also, in the same section, since this is the first time the measurement "meters" are used, I would suggest to spell out meters rather than "m" for clarification purposes. In the "Diet" section, I would recommend spelling out the number 3 for a more formal tone. The tone of the article is neutral and does not state any claims that have a particular bias.

Sources and References

In the "Distribution and habitat" section, I would suggest to make the "deep scattering layer" a clickable citation for a wiki link page, in case readers are not familiar with that this is, and allowing them easy access.

The article contains many sources and references to support the information demonstrated on Nanomia bijuga. They all seem to be from credible scientific articles. My only suggestion would be to try to find 1-2 more current sources as many of them are not current. I believe the sources do work as I clicked on some of them and they successfully directed me to the scientific article.

Organization

I think this group did a very good job at organizing their article with appropriate headings that contribute to a comprehensive article regarding Nanomia bijuga. The structure of the information flows very well and I like the order of how the information is presented.

Images and Media

I would recommend incorporating an image of the organism Nanomia bijuga to help readers visualize the anatomy and morphology of this creature. By including some images, this would enhance understanding of the topic.

Overall Impressions

Overall, I think this article does a good job in displaying information regarding Nanomia bijuga and really expanded on the original information that was presented on the Wiki page. The structure of the article was clearly presented with relevant information that is backed up by credible sources and references. I would suggest fixing some grammatical errors, such as incorporating more commas or breaking up some run on sentences for better flow. Additionally, in the "Tone and Balance" section of my peer review, I added some suggestions to make the article slightly more formal, but all pretty minor changes. I also think adding images would greatly help readers visualize Nanomia bijuga. Great job guys!