User:OliviaKnight/Roger Godberd/Jackr8106 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

OliviaKnight


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:OliviaKnight/Roger Godberd


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Roger Godberd

Evaluate the drafted changes
The draft changes are great for the most part. They add some details to Godberd's early life that were not there before. The information while nice to know, does not seem totally relevant to the rest of his influence. His article seems to lack an overall narrative or focus. The story about the trees being chopped down is good information but I'm not sure what you are supposed to follow that up with. Watch out for grammar at the end and good luck with Godberd!