User:Oliviaanne2001/Puyallup School District/Hshibly Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Oliviaanne2001


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Oliviaanne2001/Puyallup_School_District&action=edit
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Puyallup School District

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

Not much was changed here and I think the Lead still stands as a pretty solid section of the article, not much to comment on here. However, I did find the subtraction of the sidebar with information on the right to be an interesting change because the information found in it on the live article was pretty relevant and informative.

Content:

I think your addition of the opening dates of the various schools in the district was a great add. I definitely felt that the plain list of all schools found in the district in the live version of the article was a bit a bland, but this timeline provides more information on top of the already existing list. I do wonder though if a way of consolidating the information exists, for the timeline as it is right now looks a bit overwhelming and difficult to skim through for necessary information. The information on the teacher strike was great too!

Tone and Balance:

I think the tone of your article is great and unbiased. It fits Wikipedia's standard of being encyclopedia well!

Sources and References:

This specific portion could benefit from links to all the various schools listed in the timeline, should they exist. If they don't then I think the sources and references worked fine.

Organization:

There are empty sections of "Lead" and "Article body" at the bottom of the page and I'm unsure of if that was an accident or not. Additionally, the title of the first section is "article draft" rather than Lead or something of that nature and should be changed before publishing.

Overall:

Great additions overall and a quality update to the article. Great work!