User:Oluchiao/Anthocharis sara/Samuelkades Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Oluchiao


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Oluchiao/Anthocharis sara - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Anthocharis sara - Wikipedia

Lead
The article lead provides good information about the species. However, the article is fairly short. It contains an introductory sentence that effectively describes the insect species. The lead can be improved through including more information about the habitat of the species as well as its behavior and topography. The article is not separated Into different sections, so the lead cannot address the different sections of the paper. However, the lead is concise and does not contain too much information. I am unsure if the lead has been updated or if this was in the existing draft.

Content
The content of the article is relevant to the topic. The source utilized is fairly recent (2007). However, I think this article would significantly improve if the information was separated into different headings based on different aspects of the insect (eg: Reproduction, Development, Habitat, etc). I think this article could benefit from adding information about different components of this insect as mentioned previously. However, the information is accurate and referenced properly. The sentences are coherent and the detail discussed is satisfactory. The information does not involve one of Wikipedia's equity gaps as It discusses information about a specific insect species. Subheadings will be great to add!

Tone and Balance
The content added is neutral and unbiased. The information does not try to convince the reader of a specific opinion. It is informative and unbiased in tone.

Sources and References
The article uses two references. The new information added is sufficiently cited by the references. Both sources utilized are fairly recent (2007/2018) and reflect what the content say. The links work and the references are cited correctly. However, consider using a larger variety of sources to add more relevant info to the article and diversify your information sources. Both articles are peer-reviewed articles and the quality is great. However, the article would greatly improve through the use of more research articles and peer-reviewed journals in order to increase the reliability of the information provided as well as increase the diversity of authors (large spectrum).

Organization
The grammar and sentence structure is generally good, however could be improved through some minor grammatical and semantic revisions.

"Sometimes there is some overlap between the two generations.They also have two consecutive flights at one point in the year and are not present for the other half of the year." - Possibly revise this so you don't have an incomplete sentence beginning with "Sometimes". Some other incomplete sentences in the article, so try to combine some sentences in order to have better sentence structure and coherence!

"This is usually them flying up and down a linear path and is used as a way to increase the likelihood of sexual encounters with females." - Try to not start the sentence with This in order to improve sentence structure and flow throughout the article.

Additionally, try to add subheadings so that information can be effectively explained and separated based on subtopic. With one heading, It is difficult to determine what you're going to discuss. Outside of these points, the information is concise and is relevant to the topic of discussion.

Images and Media
The article does not contain any images or media. Adding some will improve the quality of the article!

Overall Impressions
Overall, this article shows promising results. Focus on adding images, working on sentence structure and grammatical errors, as well as adding subheadings. This will help the reader be much more engaged with your article and will lead to an amazing contribution! Keep up the good work.