User:OneShotMagician/Catherine Descartes/Jack.Schriber77 Peer Review

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OneShotMagician
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:OneShotMagician/Catherine Descartes
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Evaluate the drafted changes
-The lead created is an introductory, needs to add more detail describing the article. Since this article is being created it just needs to be edited later when you have filled out the rest of the article.

The second paragraph of death of a philosopher three of the sentences do not have any sources attached to them so they would be removed. The second paragraph is also confusing and needs to be reworded. In the second sentence the part of how the pastor was in Stockholm really confuses me more. This paragraph also frames the book published from her no more than secondary information she got from this random pastor. There doesn't seem to be any focus on the work she did herself. The way it is framed it almost seems that she just happened to publish this because of other peoples doing, and she does not have an importance. Did she ever have any interaction with Rene Descartes herself?

-Three sources is a good number to start with but make sure you get more by the end of the project

-Talks a lot about poems of her uncle but have no idea what those poems are. If you included more information on the poems it would be very helpful, what kind of poems, what exactly was it describing, and how did she go about publishing them in her book. I want to know more about her rather than the men around her.

-Madeleine de Scudéry was mentioned but we have no idea who she is or her importance, a bit of context could be added.

-Also look at your sources and make sure all the information is there, on source three it is missing information about date of publishing