User:OppositeWorlds/Wax/Etek6 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

OppositeWorlds


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:OppositeWorlds/Wax


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Wax

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, great job on the edits! The addition of more links to Wikipedia articles was well done, minor edits on sentence structure helped the flow of the article, and there were good edits on some wording for simple, straightforward writing. Your choices on which images to omit were all reasonable.

Here are some suggested improvements:


 * I believe that you don't need to write out the sources for your images in the captions because they are all from Wiki commons.
 * Perhaps there could be more description in the caption for the Ceroline wax; is it a plant derived wax? If so, what plant is it from?
 * Some more citations in the introduction of Petroleum Derived Waxes section might improve credibility (e.g. on the general formula of alkane paraffin wax chemical composition; on how branching has an important influence on properties)
 * Last paragraph of the introduction in Petroleum Derived Waxes section can use a couple of sentence breaks for an easier read.
 * The following sentence seems incomplete: "Such as car and shoes polishes, paints, and instrument polishes." It can be revised as something like: "Examples of these are car, shoe, and instrument polishes, as well as paints."
 * The section on Polyethylene and Related Derivatives need some citations
 * Consider editing this sentence (maybe add a semi-colon instead of the comma): "Waxes are used to make wax papers and coating papers, both have moisture- and stain-resistant applications."
 * Not sure if this is just because the link was removed when pasted to the sandbox, but having clickable links in the references would be helpful for the readers
 * Reference #7 is questionable -- not sure which part of the book it is referring to?

Good luck on your final revision :)