User:Orangearnie/Mytilenian Debate/CoolQuokka Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Orangearnie


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Orangearnie/Mytilenian_Debate?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mytilenean Debate

Evaluate the drafted changes
I thought that your draft of the article was pretty great. I suggest changing the causes for the revolt to the background so it gives insight onto what events lead to the debate. The article is in a neutral point of view as you named the people who were sources to the events and made sure to note what was happening during the events and how it went accordingly. I also think you should add sources to some of the areas in the Mytillenean revolts when they sent envoys to the Spartans. I would also add the definition with the Proxenoi in Athens. Overall I think you're article is good and that you can get the information for more about the debate.