User:Orbsofperception/Three Fujins/TiaIvy Peer Review

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User:Orbsofperception
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Hi Orbsofperception,

What you have so far is really awesome! You have a well-constructed lead section that is clear to read, and you have a nice and clear structure. However, your first sentence of your lead is a bit long; consider breaking it into two sentences. Your "Description" section is nice to have, especially given that you weren't able to put up a picture. However, I think we have to cite everything that we write on Wikipedia. Therefore, try your best to give the description based on others' published works.

I suggest having sections with headings such as "Influence of Feminism" and "Influence of Chinese Maoism" instead of just the heading "Influence." These specific headings will give readers an even clearer view of your structure.

I noticed that you didn't hyperlink works; perhaps you are not sure how. It is actually very easy to do. All you have to do is highlight a word that you would want to hyperlink, then click the link icon on the top of your page in your toolbar. It is next to the quotation marks. I suggest hyperlinking words such as "Realism", "Maoist regime", "feminist", "concubines", "China", etc., for the reader's convenience in case they are not familiar with these subjects.

The length of each section is a bit short. I think you can elaborate on them in multiple ways; you can explain the concepts of Realism, the Maoist regime, and feminism with brief sentences. I noticed that you talked about motifs; perhaps that can be extended into its own section if you can find enough information.

Your painting is closely associated with concubinage in China during the Qing dynasty. Providing more of the historical background of the period, how concubinage works, etc., can greatly enhance the depth of your article.

Your work is really amazing! I look forward to seeing your article become even better!

Your classmate