User:Orcahasenteredthechat/Hybrid beasts in folklore/Eternalsabre Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Orcahasenteredthechat)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Orcahasenteredthechat/Hybrid_beasts_in_folklore?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hybrid beasts in folklore
 * Hybrid beasts in folklore

Evaluate the drafted changes
(After taking a look at your sandbox I found that there isn’t a clear lead section, I recommend that you make a lead section that reflects the most important information. The article you are editing is in desperate need of it. Looking back at the article the sections are easy to understand, but they still have room for additional information. I believe the article is presented in a sensible order, so you do not have to reorganize the article. Reading both your sandbox page and the article the sentences sound neutral, which is good. The only word or phrase I thought sounded biased in the article you are editing was believed to be. In each section of the article, you are reviewing I didn’t see anything offtopic. The article doesn’t seem to be trying to convince a reader and is not presented as a linear viewpoint in terms of the information provides. The sources in the article Hybrid beasts in folklore looks reliable to me, the only sources I am worried about are the ones from Wikipedia. I recommend double-checking the Wikipedia sources that are hyperlinked to see if they are reliable. I looked at your sources on your biography page and they look reliable to me as well since they are from the ProQuest database, next time I recommend providing the sources in your sandbox as well so that the individual reviewing your contribution knows where the sources are from.~ )