User:Oreyes92/Political communication/Cmhernandez Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cmhernandez


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Oreyes92/Political communication - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Political communication - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

LEAD:

In your first paragraph, I think it is written very well! I loved how you have the different internal links to words. I think that will help the reader understand the content more if they are lost. I liked how you defined communication as a whole and then the article and you dive deeper into the Political Communication as a subcategory. I think that maybe you could add a sentence that ties together communication as a whole and political communication before your Robert E. Denton and Gary C. Woodward). I think your lead is clear and concise, not too wordy. Easy to follow. Also, did you correct

CONTENT:

The content you added is relevant. You added information that helps expand on the information that is already in the article as well as add more information.

TONE & BALANCE:

The information you added sounds very neutral. You are giving out information without sounding like you side with one position over another. There is no persuasion.

SOURCES & REFERENCES:

It seems that all of your new and relevant content is backed up with sources. You cited everything which is awesome. Also, like I said before, I love how much you cited words. I think that is very useful to readers and shows how much you actually want your content to be understood and to stick to the Wikipedia article.

ORGANIZATION:

In this sentence, "In this case, the organization (political leaders) use campaigns as their form of communicating and advocacy in order to obtain support from their countries people whether it is for ethical or reasons or not." you could take out "in order." That would make it more concise but definitely up to you. I think it sounds good either way. I did not find any spelling errors, YAY!

IMAGES & MEDIA:

N/A. There are no images and/ or media.