User:Orilta/Tonie Marshall/Jsweav3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Orilta)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Orilta/Tonie_Marshall?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tonie Marshall

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The "lead" section appears to be updated with material that is beneficial to the overall strength of the article - specifically, which film awarded her a Cesar Award. I think the edits and contributions made to the article in this draft and the addition of the "Activism" section of the article work to strengthen the article. I think the material edited and added was well-presented and neutral in nature. Furthermore, I think that the material contributed to the article has supported it's overall strength. To support the strength of the article further, I suggest exploring ways to develop the conciseness of your contributions.

Response to the peer review (Orilta)
Hey Jsweav3!

Thank you very much for your peer review of my draft !

I carefully took into account your suggestion about conciseness and I will make sure to keep it in mind while improving my work on the article !

Have a nice weekend!